Aloneness
She chose
She
Destiny felt steel
Wool again
She knew
She
With smooth skin
And arms
That reached miles
Longing
The length
Of six feet
She wanted
She
Skinned undercurrent
Eddied lust
She secreted away
She
Wanting that same skin
She moved
She
Forward toward
The lonely
Clouded daylight
Closing her eyes
She dreamt
She
Lay in blackness hoping
She
Felt too much
Pain
To ever tell
She loved
She
8 comments:
Wow. Very powerful. Deserves me to read it again to hear the words, again.
destiny felt steel wool again...wow great line...also love the replacement of she in each and her love of she...
i like that you measure longing in feet..how cool is that..
Love this--powerful write--
so much loneliness
opportunity on mars
Excellent write. The repetition is done so well here. I love the way you introduced the six feet measurement in an earlier stanza then mention lying down later on- fits together perfectly. Thanks
six feet of beeutiful depth here. your poetry really wrenches in each word here for me .. its so so moving and hard also to take in so much.. Love this Feathers my friend always down under ;) beez
Loneliness brings so many terrors yet somehow those terrors are often unseen by the person experiencing them. There is pain of the body and pain of the soul, the one of the soul sometimes remains unacknowledged since it is so close to who we are. Very close to the bone and such stark awareness in your poem.
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