March 6, 2012

gravity

Single string
Suspension
Fine silk
Of spiders
My eight legs
Saw
Serrated closer
Hard hit
Ground
With swift
Undenied
Pull of
Gravity

6 comments:

David Caruso said...

i like the way the words drop, visually & aurally.

Brian Miller said...

gravity will get you everytime...unless you got wings....

Claudia said...

ha - if we only could overcome gravity sometimes...like a bird..sigh...nicely penned...

Unknown said...

David mentioned it, but It such a good comment I wanted to mention it again, the poem reads and is seen in a gravitational manner, great job there. Gravity is a huge subject that could be handled in so many ways, I think the way you tackled it was very good. Nice job. Thanks

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Nicely done. Reads well.

ayala said...

Nice,,,I agree with Brian..gravity will get you every time.